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SIS B4: Chapter 109: Coward and Conviction

🕑 Added 2021-05-02 04:43:06 +0000 UTC

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Lone Immortus

thanks for reading c:

Marwin33

thank for the chapter

Lone Immortus

1. Yeah, it's an easy excuse to fall on. Thankfully, Daz isn't quite to flop on his opinions. 2. I don't see why he wouldn't make it public. It's a good chance to weaken support for the Truthians anyone may have. 3. Fingers crossed, huh? A more closed off Daz sounds scary. 4. Haha, all fixed. c:

Lone Immortus

I did, just biding my time. It is a very big comment xD I will get around to it eventually, I promise.

Also, did you see the bigger comment I did for chapter 31? I didn't get an answer so I don't really know if you saw that it was there.

Thank you for the chapter! You know, people like this archbishop are one of the worst types of people to me. Doing all these horrible things and then just shrugging and tells that they were coerced. Especially when they practically are a branch leader to a terrorist organisation/cult whose only response to the horror is "not my division". And then they try to play the sympathy card, despicable. He may have been a good man before Danielle did her conversion-voodoo on him but he definitely isn't now. Think of how horrible it must be to wake up in those tubes and forever afterwards have a craving to worship a god which killed all they love. To be forced to fight it like an addiction to nicotine but also knowing that if you slip up you may bring ruin to those near you. I really, really hate those guys now. I mean, I did before, but this just takes the cake. To be taken advantage of at your lowest point and then forever deal with the permanent bi-effects of someone trying to biologically brainwash you. If Daz does make this public, the people will see more of the true horror that are zealots that think they're in the right. This would also make them understand what their ruler is fighting more than the terror attack, just please make it public even you maybe don't mention that their leader is alive? Now, Crusher, what a mess she's about to start, I can just feel it. We've always known of her bullheadedness but what she's doing is how people can be manipulated into cults. Hopefully, we won't get a longtime friend as a traitor because I've got a feeling that if she does go to the other side, Daz will never be the same again. He's already in a really precarious emotional state that's slowly starting to stabilise to something more stable. To have one of his long-time confident betraying him? He will close up harder than an oyster and not let go for a good while. I mean, I can see how Crusher's thought process can work out but I seriously doubt that this couldn't be avoided by her just explaining herself. But, with her mental state being almost as bad as Daz own, I guess it isn't that surprising it didn't even seem to exist as a thought. Now, RR's systems really spoiled me yesterday but it also got me into this overly critical mindset for the grammar of the chapter. This seems to have followed me at least a little today. First, we have a sentence where I have put "- xxx-" around what I think would be better of gone: "This was not a person to be underestimated. -if he fought seriously and smartly.-". It just seems clunky with those parts and just generally better without it. Next, we have a case of someone probably writing fast and not having the time to let go of shift: "OF course, if", "OF" really should be "Of". Lastly, we have two cases of me thinking that a different word would suit better: ", but there weren't archbishops." where I think "there" should be "they", "connect to the Lord as I.", were "connect" probably should be "connected". That's all from me today. Hope you have good one Lone, peace!


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