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SIS Book 4 Chapter 74: Muscle Density and North

🕑 Added 2020-10-21 01:22:57 +0000 UTC

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Fixed all the errors, thank you. c: The only thing that doesn't seem to need permanence thus far for a following thing to gain a Star of Eternity are classes. Races do need multiple stars to gain permanence. As seen in the trials of el dorado, when Daz's race was returned to human. Lindsey is precious, huh?

Thank you for the chapter! It seems that slowly but surely our Daz is accumulating more and more permanent effects, to the point that it's not even ridiculous to think that in the future all his stats and abilities are now "perma-locked" to him. I don't remember myself, but did he have to do that to his race/(species?) as well? That seems like a thing that's hard to take away from someone. I'm also really glad he chose to "star" his regeneration and not just pure "defence", it wouldn't do to have him lose just because his regen was off. Also, Lindsey is a wonderful person that must be protected at all costs, thank you for listening to my ted talk. On another topic, grammar misses: "makes a lot of senses" where it "senses should be "sense". "What of his already possessed", where it seems like the word "skills", "abilities" or something like that in the end. "When you beat the Truthians", "you" should probably be "you've" unless Rose expects him to read it during the fight... Lastly "he had a fright aura" where you probably should replace "fright" with "fear", it simply sounds better. Hope you have a good one, peace!


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