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LTW[R] Book 2 Stronghold & Secrets: Chapter 16: Unfortunate Fortune and Backroom Connections

🕑 Added 2020-10-15 19:47:43 +0000 UTC

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Fixed the error, thank you. c: Yeah, as overpowered as he is when you think about his unique skills, I don't want everything to be perfect. It can be tough to do that without it feeling forced but it's rewarding writing a book I'd enjoy reading.

Thank you for the chapter! Now even though this cuts deep and annoys me greatly I really like how you made Lone dodge the apologizing. Personally, I think it makes Lone much more of a living character and not a Gary Stu, even the action itself made me cringe onto my soul, in a weirdly good way for you. Also, some litrpg, I'm happy, yes. More seriously though, it was nice to get a refresher on skills like regeneration that I haven't seen the description of for a long, long time. Don't have too much to say about the whole timer thingy, it feels reasonable and as of right now is laying on about 333 days left until it's finished healing. The chapter felt though like a reminder that while Lone doesn't exactly luck out everywhere, his mentors have all been true supporters. On a completely different subject; grammar faults, or rather, should I say grammar fault: "She's isn't dying" where "she" would suffice instead of "she's". Anywho, hope you have a good one, peace!


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