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SIS Book 4 Chapter 72: Semester Two Begins and Goals

🕑 Added 2020-10-12 23:03:12 +0000 UTC

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Both errors fixed, thank you. c: It was rather backgroundy, the goal, huh? And yeah, I felt it was time to end the semester. Things are still too slow for my liking even with my arc planning, haha. We're getting there though.

Thank you for the chapter! It seems you found a solution to the whole "I've enough points to never need focusing on them" aspect of the story, which you gave a reasonable excuse/reason for it, well done! Also nice to have some of the system aspects, but seriously how out of the loop am I, where I almost forgot that these latest actions had been for the whole semester thing... Also, good for Daz to have an over two-month break from mythological cities and politics, just taking some time to T&R (Train and Rule (And relax with Madison!)). I didn't personally feel anything too unnatural about the time skip, it felt more natural than anything else, so good job there! Now to the minor faults, I found: "Now in punishes", "in" should be "it". That was grammar ones I found, but more importantly, could you "fat-text" or do that system box thing on the world announcement? It feels pretty weird having the system "speak" through an ordinary paragraph. Anywho, hope you have a good one, peace!


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