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LTW[R] Book 2 Stronghold & Secrets: Chapter 15: Dwarven Law and Unusual Keenness

🕑 Added 2020-10-12 13:14:20 +0000 UTC

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Best of luck, Elvis! I hope you get the job. She's an important character and it was a nice change to do an entire chapter from her perspective for once since we only see glimpses of the inner workings of her mind from time to time. Considering her importance to the story overall, she deserved some character development, haha.

Thank you for the chapter! Breena, oh how I feel for you. You've made her anxieties and stammering both seem realistic and natural so kudos to you, truly. It was actually pretty nice to have a different POV through the chapter, I almost always love this, as in this case. Personally, I feel like it spices things up a bit from the regular Lone and Soph/ie perspectives. Breena's so differing personality just gives an entirely new picture of the whole. I also really like to see the frustration of being the person that's having your loved one being discriminated against. It switches their roles in a nice way. Also shows how racism doesn't just affect the ones' being targeted. I didn't find any serious faults in the chapter and I apologize for the now seeming rambling, but I got a letter in for my first interview, for my (hopefully) first job, so I'm pretty excited right now. Anywho, hope you have a good one, peace!


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