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SIS Book 4 Chapter 71: Trial and Regrets

🕑 Added 2020-10-08 16:49:40 +0000 UTC

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Yeah, I really need to build Mother Danielle up as a true person who stands against Daz, not just a cardboard baddie to be vanquished. Takes time to set up motivations, characters and logical means to combat each other without things being ridiculously one-sided. It's a struggle. I worry it's boring, and my slow release rate combined with my dipping patreon income concern me. You really help motivate me, haha. I always look forward to your comments. Fixed the errors, by the way. Thanks as always for pointing them out.

Thank you for the chapter! I liked this chapter, I really do. I don't what it is, but having everything going the peaceful way and succeeding, it's almost cathartic. It's also nice to see enemies not being pure monsters but being a nuanced mess, a mess that is as human as they come. Was this chapter shorter? Because it felt like it went by in a second. Anyways, I've probably mentioned this before, surely multiple time really, but POV's of other characters is something I love, especially those that make the character/'s and/or their faction more living. The way you capture the faith of the populace also strikes me, it isn't forced, for them, it's always there and their lives revolve around it. You showed that really well here. That last segment, it made really see Mother Danielle as an antagonist to be excited for, for Daz and her battle will surely be legendary! I only found two grammatical errors this time: "for him murdered" should be "murdering" instead; "indeed." capital "i" missing here. Anywho, hope you have a good one, peace!


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