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SIS Book 4 Chapter 70: The Priest and Explaining To Do

🕑 Added 2020-10-03 22:38:55 +0000 UTC

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I tend to reread my chapters after your comments and I found 2 small errors, haha. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was tough to write since it's a single scene, which for me, is difficult to make interesting without dragging it on for too long. Chapter still ended up being 600 words longer than planned, but I'm glad it came out well.

Thank you for the chapter! First of all, very well done on the Truthian. You could actually feel his faith and he acted in a way that showed how he truly saw his way as the truth. The moment before actually also is a great reminder to show how much Daz has grown to accept this attempt to diplomacy. It's also nice to see how Daz doesn't know everything that happens in New Earth, it's a good way of showing that he isn't omniscient. Also, I truly understand Daz choice in the end, it's one that fits Daz as a character, his loyalty to people that are his. This chapter was one of those chapters where I couldn't find any flaws, this could be because I just woke up and literally doing this the first thing, but I digress. Anywho, hope you have a good one, peace!


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